I don't know why the site is not letting me rate this on the numbered scale, but I'd give it a 4 out of 5. I really liked this little piece. The shifting between the present and flashbacks was well done on its own, but the interspersing of the lines of "The Raven" was perfect and really raised the level of the writing. I loved the line about nearly missing her lips. It's so real. Pretty early on I knew exactly how it was going to end, but the getting there was lovely. Only one thing I took issue with at all: It made no sense to me that he would even try to read the poem while the kids were coming. I didn't understand why he didn't wait until later in the evening, or simply bring the book and chair closer to the door and stop complaining about the kids interrupting.
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