I found your review request (so no,I'm no stalker) and figured I could give it a shot.
The only thing I actually have to say is that your piece left me in tears!I was dying of laughter at its over the top nature!Although the king was a madman,I have to agree with him on this matter. Whoever makes dessert without any bananas should be put to death so I have no sympathy for the Chef. Detailed descriptions also made the scenes clear and easy to follow,therefore providing immersion. Fantastic work!
I found your review request floating about(so no,I'm not a stalker) and figured that I might as well give it a shot.
Having had this type of relationship with my dad(back in his wilder and younger years),I could really empathise with a female perspective of the matter (I am a guy,so it never really bothered me). The piece allowed me to put myself into my sisters shoes and see how it could have affected her (no wonder why she hates alcohol). The piece did a great job of immersion and to that,I say fantastic work.
I found your review request so I thought I could give it a shot!
I found your piece to be a good and humourous look of life as an insect. I laughed at the part where the insect(fly,I presume) hitched a ride from the hound.Sounds like something an insect would do.
Great piece!
I found your piece on the Please Review thread and thought I could give it a shot.
Please keep in mind that these are my thoughts.
I am no poetry afficionado so you may take my opinion with a grain of salt but I liked your willingness to use the random words given in the prompt to make a poem. I think it is a great trait to try and push your writing boundaries with such challenges and it only adds to your ability. The grammar and language mechanics were also perfect.
The only issues I had with the piece is the storytelling as there were parts where I was left confused (to be fair,I am a bit of a ditz). Though be fair,it would be hard for most people to tell a good story from a group of randomly thrown words.
Other from that,I found it to be an interesting read.
Thanks for sharing!
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