You've got some creative mind, y'know. I like the idea of the attic. The scene in the attic was short though... I'm not saying it's bad, but I know you can make it better by emphasizing more on that scene, 'cause in my opinion, it's the highlight of the story. It's just a suggestion, anyway. :)
Continue writing and you'll be better, you'll see. Carry on! God bless you!
That's so true. We have a lot of pets at home, bu sometimes, I regret to really spend time with them, but I know that they give me so much, though I give them less - like what you wrote. Anyway, thanks for the inspiration. God bless you!
I simply love this work-of-art. To think that you were able to personify the painting hanging on the wall amazed me. I believe that there is a first time for everything - and you were able to let your work-of-art portray it. I felt your being a true person while reading this. I believe you... I agree with you... I respect you - that's what I feel. I really like the ideas on how you used your words: especially the thing about colors that represent an experience you experienced (correct me if I got it wrong). You're a writer in nature... and I know you can still improve, and explore the field of literature further. Carry on! :)
Let not the voices of negativity consume your mind. Listen only to the voices of positive vibes. At times in our life, we hear voices that tell us to do this, do that... and all the blah-blahs.. but be vigilant enough with what type of voice you listen to. I really think this poem teaches its readers to listen to positive voices... voices of motivation and encouragement to soar the endless skies of life. Carry on! :D
- V.D. Tamien :)
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