This is very informative and helpful. It gives me an idea on how to bring forth other fellow readers and writers who to this wonderful website. The tips on writing an email are straight forward and to the point. There is definitely something exciting about reaching out to others, but the article helps the emailer to get to the point right away. Overall very good info.
I feel like your story fragment had a lot of potential, but there are some grammar errors within the sentences. For example, I should always be capitalized and so should Spiderman, as this is a name representing someone. The element of surprise was well done though, as I was not expecting the appearance of Spiderman. Good work and keep writing.
Your poem evokes the voice of one who was lost but has now been found. I feel like the rhyme was really good, but it could have used more variation. That being said, a poem is a form of art that is unique to the writer. It starts happy and ends hopefully. I liked it. Keep writing.
While this idea is a fragment, it holds a lot of potential. The short burst of the words really sucks you in and makes you want more. If you wrote more to this, I would be interested in reading this.
Once upon a time there was a cooling cup of coffee in a well loved mug with a couple chips at the top. Everyday, an elderly man with a deeply creased face drank several times from this same cup. One day, the old man did not take his deep sips from the mug. Because of that, the cup grew fearful that it was no longer loved since it was not in use. Until finally, the cup was once again rejoicing from the warm feel of coffee being poured into by the old man's own daughter.
When reading this poem, I can really feel the despondency of the narrator. While it is short and easy to read, it flows well. I also like the rhymes and like how they are not too heavy on the poem. Metaphorically, I really feel like you nailed it. I definitely enjoyed reading your piece and thank you for sharing it on here.
Your use of descriptors was very well done and not too much. Overall, I like your story. It's short and to the point without being superfluous. The only thing that I would recommend is using quotations for your dialogue, as that was a bit confusing for me. Great job overall!
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