Hush

(Original)

Lock them away

Oh no, don't Say.
Certain things on your mind.
Lock them away.
Where no one can find.

Secretly putting my axe to the grind.
My feelings I could not bury.
Drank so much whiskey, I thought I went blind.
Felt like I'd been hung by a jury.

Somehow I was able to harness the fury.
Turning it into something beautiful.
It made me feel all soft and furry.
Just before it became peaceful,

But then I could not help but explode.
Spilling the beans and breaking my code.

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(Revised)

Hush

How dare you open your mouth to say,
Those certain things that you have on your mind.
Why don't you just try to lock them away.
Just bury them deep, where no one can find.

Secretly putting emotion behind.
My feelings; could not begin to bury.
Drank to much whiskey then thought I went blind.
Felt like I had been hung by a jury.

Somehow was able to harness fury;
It had turned into something beautiful.
Really made me feel all soft and furry.
Just before it became quiet, peaceful.

Eventually, could not help but explode.
I'm spilling my beans and breaking the code.


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(Under Review for meter)

Hush

How dare you open up your mouth to say.
Those certain things weigh heavy on your mind.
Just try to lock your feelings far away,
Or bury deep that not a soul can find.
The secret; put emotion close behind.
Some feelings I could not begin to hide.
I guzzled whiskey, thought I had gone blind.
It felt like i'd been hung upon my pride.
There's just too many things, could not let slide.
I turned it into something beautiful,
With peace and quiet again on my side.
Until my mind again was brimming full.
Eventually had no choice but explode.
I'm spilling my beans and breaking the code.

(Spenserian)