This is a WDC Power Reviewer Review. I am not a professional copy editor. These are my opinions as a writer, reader, and lover of words. Please take or leave my opinions as you will.

Overall Impression:

Wow, the action in this prologue didn't stop to give me a breath. It was exciting to read and left me wanting to know more about the characters and what was going to happen to them.

Plot:

A baby half-breed human/elf is wanted by some fantasy badguys. His parents fight to save him.

Scene/Setting:

It was a typical fantasy setting, but your description of the ride Latherine took to get to her home was so realistic that I didn't quite believe that this was a fantasy at first. I liked that about your story. Good details.

Characters:

You used small clues to set up that Latherine was an elf and William was human. The shape of their ears, the sound of their names, ect. Well done. It gave good flavor to your story without being overwhelming.

Dialog:

Good strong dialog. Perfectly in keeping with the setting and characters you have created.

Grammar and Mechanics:

I did not spot any obvious grammar errors in this prologue.

Suggestions:

No real suggestions at all. I really loved this piece! It could stand as is without a problem.

Take care.