This is a fantastic short story. Your vocabulary and descriptions are very well put together. My favorite line is "Her voice was like a winter breeze, stinging his flesh."

Is this the only part of this story? You could totally add a beginning to the story that prefaces this as the ending, or you could use this as part of a turning point in a story.

I'm not sure if this is all, or if you have other plans for this piece of writing, but great work!