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![]() | Do Not Go Gently ![]() They come at night. Stay by the nightlight. ![]() |
Dear Early, This is a Power Review! ![]() Before I begin I wish to remind you that anything I say or suggest in this review is my opinion. ![]() ![]() Meaning: This is a horror genre story. The "Do not go" part I take to mean do not go with them, the ones that "Come at night". ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() To anyone else the Dying One was a 10 year old boy. Her eyes met the glowing golden gaze of Dying One. I notice that you refer to Dying One as both that, and as "the Dying One"... Which is it? ![]() To anyone else the Dying One was a 10 year old boy. To anyone else, the Dying One was a 10 year old boy. Missing a comma here ![]() He was the one she's seen in the mirror and he did bad things. He was the one she saw in the mirror. He did bad things. Just a little smoother like that this I find. Sometimes he told her about what he did when the lights went out to the other ones who could see them. Sometimes, he told her about what he did when the lights went out to the other ones who could see them. Comma missing. He took them all, and sometimes he ate them up. He took them all, and sometimes, he ate them up. A comma would make it a little tidier ![]() Other-times he took their light away so they stayed with him in the night forever. Other times, he took their light away so they would stay with him in the night forever. Other times shouldn't be hyphenated, and you missed a comma, and I cleaned up the ending. It was loneliness that was making him sick and she was the only one who could save him. It was loneliness that was making him sick, and she was the only one who could save him. A missing comma “If you do not come with me tonight I’ll die.” “If you do not come with me tonight, I’ll die.” Another comma missing here If he died then she’d be alone with the Raging One forever. If he died, then she’d be alone with the Raging One forever. If/Then sentences are separated with a comma right before the then. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() |PART A: | |CONTENT: 5/5| |IMPACT: 5/5| |CHARACTERS: 5/5| |PLOT: 5/5| |OVERALL: 20/20| |PART B: | |VOCAB: 5/5| |GRAMMAR: 3/5| |TYPOS: 5/5| |STRUCTURE: 5/5| |OVERALL: 18/20| |SUMMARY: | |PART A: 20/20| |PART B: 18/20| |OVERALL: 38/40| |OVERALL: 5/5| If you have any questions, please do not hesitate to contact me; I'd be more than happy to explain something or help with something. All the best, ~Kev This review was on the behalf of:
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