Very good, enjoyed reading the story. In particular the plot twist at the end where the Dying One turns out to be the Raging One.

Only comments I could possibly make on such a well written story are these;

You mentioned the first time Lumen had seen the Raging One was that he had smiled and had no teeth, yet in the end he had rows of teeth. Was this on purpose? Couldn't find the correlation.

Just a suggestion, maybe some emotional content from Lumen when she realizes she was tricked, something like "A violent shiver of fear struck her as the Dying One did something Lumen had never seen before. He smiled. Inside his mouth were rows and rows of needle sharp fangs."

Anyway, just a suggestion.

Thanks for the story!