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** Image ID #1937903 Unavailable ** ![]() ![]() ![]() Greetings, PandaPaws Licensed VetTech ![]() ![]() As many times as we have interacted in the "The Poet's Place " ![]() Your title lures prospective readers into the realm of your imagination very effectively with its provocative implications. The metaphoric imagery and personification of an abstract concept creates a solid vision to which the reader can easily connect and become a virtual participant in this gripping experience. The selection of the Rondeau form was an excellent choice, because the tight pattern of rhyming and repetition projects a powerful tone of intensity. The rhyming is very well executed with a natural flow of the language without any distortion whatsoever. The use of the present participle (-ing) forms of the verbs, especially so many in quick succession, instead of the direct present tense, weakens the expression a bit, in my humble opinion. I am also not a fan of the stylistic practice of beginning each line with upper case letters. It seems confusing and interrupts the pacing. Nonetheless, you have composed a powerful poem that sends a valuable message. Write on! Here’s wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com. Let the creativity flow from your soul! ![]() Dave "The Poet's Place " ![]() ![]() ![]()
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