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 Welcome to WDC Khariyya! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!  I loved the alluring title that promises a fascinating fantasy!  Your prologue introduces the important character as the dreamer and you set up an mystery about the effect of her leaving "home" andnot entering the dream. It does invite me to read on to find out more. You give us an inkling of what creatures live in this magic word and I like the flow of the name of your world.  It is interesting that as she ran she dreamt as it seems that dreams keep her from focussing on her real life. I was not sure how the first line of the prologue connects to the next one , which is giving background. I was little confused as you said her dreams were from out of this world yet she dreamed of a world she created. You also say it was her "new favourite"! Does that mean she ahd another favourite before this one? The prologue in its brevity raises my curiosity and I can't wait to hear more information to satisfy my queries.  Carry on with this imaginative work!!  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar Come and join the WDC Party! Like: "WDC 14th Birthday Sr. Mod. Challenge"  ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/15/2014 @ 8:34pm EDT