Title/Subtitle: "Lucy's Rainbow" is a lovely title for your daughter's poem. The rainbow was a symbol that all is well, Lucy is in her new home.

Message/Theme: The author's message was simply I love you, and you left us too soon. You followed Lucy's wishes by burying her in the plot she picked, and remembering her smile and her spirit in life.

Style: The style is an Emotional, Personal, Tribute to a daughter, friend, relative to all that came to pay their last respect.

Form/Flow: The form - five stanza's with four lines of nine or ten syllables while the flow was smooth with remembrance of a wonderful daughter.

         Tone: Sad and admiring, affectionate and tender with a respectful tribute to one so loved.

         Mood: Contemplative and loving, grateful for the time the author had with Lucy.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery is that of a mother doing all the things her daughter asks for, wanting to make everything special. The rainbow was a beautiful sign of love.

Suggestions & Typos: I didn't find any errors, only that one line didn't read quite right to me - "Your family were all stood by so sad" could read - Your family were all standing by sad.

Overall Thoughts: Losing your daughter so young is so sad. I had a friend who lost her daughter so young, she had Niemann–Pick disease. She was a young, twenty-five years old.

FAVORITE LINE:

As if to thank us, there appeared above
God's covenant with man in hues of love,
A glorious rainbow spread across the sky
The day we gathered near to say "Goodbye".


These lines are so perfect and beautiful together. To have that rainbow reach across the sky was a perfect symbol of God's love. It had to be traumatic but wonderful at the same time. I think I would have cried a river to have seen that after losing someone so special. This poem is a great tribute to your daughter. The picture with the rainbow is a nice touch for this poem. It shows a beautiful woman with a great smile.



Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,

Jeannie



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