Hello, queenkissy!

Thank you so much for bidding on the package I donated to The Four Season Auction! This is review 1 of the 5 you are to receive.

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Title/Theme
You have this poem listed under:
Relationship
Friendship
Experience

All of these fit very well although there are MANY available that would, I believe. If you haven't already, you can list other topics/genres under the "keyword" section of your item.

I like at first I felt like you were speaking about the coffee itself that you were alluding to a relationship with, but it could really be either the coffee itself or the barista that makes it for you. I like poems that can be read in several different ways.

Great job!

Imagery
Words like "impress" and "leave me" help to express physical imagery in this piece but also emotional imagery. I love the use of "radical designs" and "glimpse of your smile" as I was able to see those things easily as if I was standing in the cafe with you.

Rhythm/Flow
Sometimes an acrostic poem can feel forced since you have to break lines, sometimes, in an awkward place to make the next line start with the proper letter. However, I never came across wording, line breaks, or other aspects of the poem that didn't flow well here.

Rhyme
Not many acrostic poems also include poetic devices at the END of the lines as well as at the beginning. I feel the rhymes you incorporated really helped to strengthen the impact just because of the more poetic "sound" of the lines.

Structure
I love acrostic forms when done right as they can reiterate the theme based on the word (or words) the poem was based on. Some see this form as simple, but to really make it work well, it's important to take the form more seriously and I think you've done that here.

Diction (Word Choice)
The same words that create such powerful imagery in this piece are the ones that stand out as great word choices. These words serve two purposes: describing the scene as it is viewed, but they bring across such powerful emotion.

Grammar
I found no grammatical errors in this piece... well done!

Most Liked
Standing in the queue,
Time slips away.
Adieu.

These last three lines say SO much. The time spent waiting to see your favorite barista and get that beautifully designed coffee is care-free time and that shows. It also goes to show that you feel this is an important interaction so the use of "Adieu" instead of "Goodbye."

Personal Thoughts
I really enjoyed this piece. I think even this short, single stanza brings across a strong emotional impact while seeming so simply constructed. This is a great piece! Write On!




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