Personal Impressions~
         Hey there Cadie reviewing for House of Sensual Prose Erotic Language. My first impression when I read this piece was . You've got a very erotic piece here. Keep this story in mind while writing for Building Emotion. You've done the assignment in telling me what your words are and highlighting them.
Corrections or Clarifications
It was the women that were supposed to be in awe of him! He was accustomed to being on the receiving end of fawning females. Living the other side of the experience is completely new to him. This might need some more detail. I take these statements as Clark is used to being the one seducing women. Now he's the one being seduced. Something I couldn't really see was her height. As she was whispering in his ear, did he bend down to meet her? When they end up on the bed, you sort of lose the body parts that are receiving attention.

Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

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