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Review of Tommy the Driver  
Review by Cadie Laine
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Introduction~
*NoteP*          Cristen here giving you a final review for Erotic Language. *Cry*

*AsteriskV*NOTE: This review is only the opinion of one author. This review is meant to help and NOT hurt.

Personal Impressions~
*NoteP*          I enjoyed your story about the rich lady and her driver.

Showing vs. Telling~
*NoteP*          Your story provided a plethora of physical senses. You've used what you've learned well in this story. Slowing down the scene and showing what the characters are feeling, more so Tommy than Rose. Good job with your descriptions and characterizations they were realistic and believable. The conversation between the characters was just enough to keep the story moving forward.

Conclusions~
*NoteP*          You've done well with this class especially since you were the only one who stuck it out. thank you for your time and hard work. You should be proud of yourself. *Proud* I know I'm proud of you.

*NoteP* Thank you for sharing and Keep Writing!



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