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I have only read the first entry in this journalised story. This seems like the start of a journey into madness. At the moment he is only thinking about evil deeds with no real intent. (Haven't we all) I think I will need to read on to find out how bad it gets.

Hint: To get your work in the right order go to manage book and follow the instructions about numbering.

This first entry establishes your POV character. We know how his life has been so far. We know the sort of person his father is, and that there is no mother in the picture. His thoughts signpost where the story might be going.

I see no problems with spelling or grammar. The one piece of dialogue you do have is realistic. I will read further once this challenge is over.

Keep Writing

Sue


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .