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THE BELLA OF MY LIFE  [E]
About my service dog, Bella.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hallo!
What a beautiful poem about such an important companion in your life! I love the format and rhyme scheme, and the light-hearted yet sentimental tone to the piece. You bring out the relationship so well. The various aspects of day-to-day life that you share give a glimpse into a very deep understanding between both of you.

Suggestions:
1. You've left the item type at 'other'. Suggest you change it to 'poetry', to give this more exposure on site.
2. In the brief description, you call the dog 'Bells'. Is this a typo?
3. Maybe a note on what made you rewrite the poem ... ? I appreciate that both versions are open to the reader. (My review is of the rewrite, the one on top.)
4. 1st line - I think you mean wash-and-'wear', though I understand if you are making a purposeful pun on that!
5. 2nd line - do you mean 'very' short hair, or again, is that a purposeful pun?
6. In the verse about going to church - maybe you could make it 'sun, rain or snow' for consistency.


Thanks for sharing this one! *Dog2*
Sonali

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