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 Nifty, Nonfeasance Sentiments  [ASR]
Came up with title out of the blue. Found it to be interesting.
by Anna Marie Carlson
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I hit 'read and review' and this one showed up.

The title and brief description worked to encourage me to click. I wonder why you've left the item type as 'other', wouldn't you like to call it an 'essay / article'? Also, you've picked only one genre. Maybe 'experience' and 'relationship' might work there, in addition to 'opinion'.

With regard to the layout, I'd suggest increasing the size and line-spacing and changing the font, to make this easier on the eye.

Nonfeasance is a new word I learned from you and a new concept and I enjoyed the various aspects of it you covered and your explanations. Since it's something I'm still trying to comprehend, I found the pace of your thoughts and the change from one topic to the other a little difficult to keep up with, but I think that'll be taken care of on a second reading.

I could relate to some of the situations, like people forgetting the punch line of a joke, or someone proficient at something lacking an audience.

I personally am not in favour of dolphins being made to do tricks for the amusement of human beings, so that paragraph made me a bit uncomfortable. I'm not sure you whether you meant them doing tricks in the wild or in captivity, though.

I completely agree that sometimes, a thoughtful act can mend a broken relationship. I'm also with you on being grateful for the miracles of nature.

I didn't understand this one - Book wormers stick their necks out to learn ways of opportunity.

Tiny typo - 'birds song' needs an apostrophe.

Thank you for giving me lots to think about!
- Sonali

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