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by A Guest Visitor
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Celebrating you with an Anniversary Review.
Greetings from "The WDC Angel Army" 

"NOVEMBER REVIEWS"  

Hallo!
I visited your portfolio because it's your WDC Anniversary!

I like this poem.
The one-word lines, with each verse culminating in the phrase 'Birthday Party' give a good feeling.

I like how the poem progresses, from things, to people and sharing, and deeper feelings. It's a message that careful attention to each aspect leads to an intangible-but-real enrichment which is forever.

My suggestions would be:
1. Pick a couple more genres, maybe 'community' or 'friendship' ... ?
2. Maybe some Writing ML, like font, size, line-space and center. Perhaps even colour and emoticons, if you feel like it.

(As an aside, I like how your folder is called Poetry? with a question mark! *Wink* That's a nice touch! *Smile* )

Write On!
- Sonali


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