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 WLTM IRL  [18+]
A vampire uses online dating to find his victims.
by Jeff masquerading as Deadpool
Review of WLTM IRL  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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This one showed up on Random Review and I'm so glad it did! The title and brief description hooked me and the story held my interest throughout. The genres work too. Maybe you'd like to add a cover picture.

I was expecting a twist somewhere, and thought it would be with Marta. So I was disappointed when she passed. But then I could wait for the twist with Kerry.

I like what you say about the internet, that one can pretend to be anyone.

A special mention of the easy to read font for my weak eyesight!

SUGGESTIONS:
1. The paragraph above WLTM IRL - Would Like To Meet, In Real Life slowed my reading a bit. I think it has some 'telling'. Maybe you could look at it again.
2. There's one paragraph in which you call the person 'they' and 'she'. (Sorry I forgot to note which para).

Thanks for this intriguing tale!
Write On,
I love these owls

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