This is a very positive story given the negativity of the beginning. The first thing that hit me about the piece was that this was written for a show not tell class but you begin by telling us Sarah's life is awful. I think that could be skipped. You show us the reality of that paragraph in what follows. That intro weakened the beginning for me. You did a great job of showing things throughout the piece. When I reread it skipping that intro it was both more enjoyable and more immersive in the character's world. At no point did I need to be told she was an angry bitter person. Her treatment of the others in the story was almost too exaggerated as being awful. I was left wondering what had soured her on life so badly. It seems like her mother's faith should have influenced her at least a little in passing. Perhaps her father was a bitter man... I can't imagine what could have happened to her in her short life to make her that angry. I have had a lot of crap happen to me in my life and I am not like that...

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .