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Review #4739188
Viewing a review of:
Wonderland 2024  [18+]
My collected entries for the 2024 edition of Wonderland.
by Jeff
         Review for entry/chapter: "I-2. UNimportant Things
Review of Wonderland 2024  
Review by Jayne
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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This is an "I Write in 2024 review!


Hello, ! Thank you for supporting this great activity!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
Great take on a the modern day employment construct and excellent use of the prompt.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
See as this is a Wonderland entry, the book title is accurate, as is the description. Depending on what you're doing with the book after the activity ends, you could consider something that invites the reader to explore the work, instead of the straightforward description.

*Checkb*Content and Flow:You've laid out your thoughts well and in an easy-to-follow linear progression. There are no obvious gaps in your argument/opinion that jumped out at me.

I have to agree with your thoughts on the matter. In our age bracket, I think it's a mistake we all made at the beginning of our careers and learned the hard way it wasn't what was promised by those before us. I find the younger generation (and I'm generalising here, so grain of salt and all that) has figured this out much earlier, and adjusted their expectations/inputs accordingly.

Having the time for family and personal interests is a fabulous trade-off, although something tells me you're probably still a rock star, even without spending crazy hours on projects.


*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I found no problems. Your writing is consistently well structured and error-free.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
I see you're in the home stretch of Wonderland! Plenty of time left, and I wish you the best of luck!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*

My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim



   *CheckG* You responded to this review 03/24/2024 @ 9:09pm EDT
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