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 | Diamonds, Pearls and Tea  [E] Flash Fiction Entry.  |
| (5.0)| Hi L.A.Saxe , HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  I am reviewing your piece of flash fiction, "Diamonds, Pearls and Tea" , in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" .Please remember all opinions are solely my own, and any advice given is done so with the sole intention of being helpful.  What I liked: Everything! Every single thing about this short piece of fiction appealed to me. I wasn't sure what to expect when I started reading, but within the first couple of sentences, I was hooked. I love the way Dotty and her friends keep distracting Inspector Bin and taking his concentration away from the reason he is there. I was wondering where he was heading with the "blue—" that keep getting cut off. It became obvious pretty quickly that these ladies had committed some kind of crime. I thought that would be the reveal at the end, the fact that these older ladies were the criminals, and when that reveal came, I patted myself on the back. But then, when the real twist came, I laughed out loud. I love that the old ladies were really bluebirds, disguised as ladies. That was a stroke of genius. Their unmasking of themselves is perfection. Suggestions: This is more of a question than a suggestion. I just wondered what made Detective Bin call on the ladies to ask questions? Were they in close proximity to the jewellery store? Or did he have a tip off that they might know something? If that's the case, I thought he would have paid closer attention. Even if he didn't have a tip off about them, he was pretty dire as a detective. It was obvious to me they were hiding something straight away. Even if I didn't guess the fact that they were all giant birds in human costumes! Parting Comments: This is a very enjoyable flash fiction. The twist is fantastic, and I don't think anyone will guess it when they read this. It's so clever. And very, very funny. Happy account anniversary! Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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