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 Thursday  [E]
Mindless rambling
by D Babs
Review of Thursday  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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         Hi! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
          Title: Thursday
         First Impression: So, why are you writing about this particular day? Hmmm, what is it about a Thursday? It's a random day that reoccurs every week. This one caused you to recollect and perhaps wallow in vivid memories. Some are cherished. Some seem bittersweet. They have become a part of you for better or worse. The title intrigued me.
         What needs your attention: I cannnot think of anything. I like the reflective voice in this piece of writing. Your humanity shows. You remember and you still consider the what ifs. Your images are vivid and have not faded with time. Wait... should there be an 'a' before mention of the rose against your lips? This is miniscule, eh?
         What part I like best: I appreciate your imagery, your descriptions. I can picture the sunset as you compare it with the dying embers of a fire. Both glow with a distinct intensity.You wonder if the former lover is visited by your ghost which is a great way to introduce memories. The relationship has ended and you still continue to breathe. Your life still carries on even with the mundane, the reflexive. I too wonder who turns on the moon? I like that you incorporate the different senses. Relationships are nothing if not complicated. Yes, they are comparable to ivy choking a house. Another bit of vivid imagery. Your musings surface whenever they wish and this is believable.
         Overall impression: This writing evokes so many word pictures and the sharing hints at a commonality. Memories are never out of reach or forgotten. They linger and provoke. you capture that well.
         Thank you for allowing me to read your work.It has been my pleasure.
         What does the fox say???? Listen carefully. ( 2003 characters )          
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