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The Houseguests  [E]
Little things distress little minds.
by Bobby Lou Stevenson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Oh good grief, this is hilarious. Poor Joe’s desperate attempts to eliminate not one but two horrible houseflies culminates in his admittance to Bellevue, which we all know is the New York insane asylum. Your rollicking, exaggerated tale was a fun read, as Joe escalated from one weapon to another in his failed attempts. The meter flowed well and rhymed in a playful way that suits the theme, and I spun from one scene to the next with breathless amusement. I appreciate all the realistic little details, especially the mention of the Spanish fine china Lladro figurine.

A line count is always a good habit to form, especially around here when you might want to enter contests. You wouldn’t like to forget it. Your formatting is too, with large clear font. Perhaps underlining and centering the title at the top would lend a more neat appearance.

As a tall tale type of poem, the rhyme and meter work for me. I view poetry as a highly subjective art form, and whether your syllables measure out properly doesn’t matter so much as the content which has been created to share with others. Perhaps you would like to rate it 13+, since it mentions shotguns and trying to harm something.

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