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| (4.0)| Hello Spectre Lives! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . Happy Anniversary! I look forward to seeing you in the halls of WDC! I liked how you spun this story. It's a unique and creative way to write about a spectre picking up a soul.The frustration of the spectre was clearly noticeable. You wrote how the soul kept blinking in and out of death, because of his defibrillator really well. Your opening was strong and grabbed my attention, the story held my attention throughout, and you wrapped up the story nicely. I do have a few suggestions below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  time zone andtime zone, and "Yes I'm here "Yes, I'm here  when your dead.when you're dead.  "Yeah we've met"Yeah, we've met  your body laying your body lying  fractures and physically bleeding out and internally, fractures, bleeding out, and internal bleeding,  Spectre couldn't help himself but to think. I really miss Spectre couldn't help but think how much he missed  now daysnowadays  "Yes I'm here"Yes, I'm here  its supposedit's supposed Thank you so much for sharing your story with us. I enjoyed it.  Intuey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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