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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby ~ Way behind!

"Game of Thrones"  Hello fellow writer. My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes. Title: The StrollFirst Impression: What a simple, innocuous title. The ensuing story is anything but simple, or innocent. Reading this was a delight. A mother out for a stroll in a mall seems like an everyday, usual occurrence. Malls everyday are inundated with such activities. The storyline veers unexpectedly into something else entirely. This woman had died and needed to pass over willingly. I like this concept!What needs your attention: I admit to being a bit confused. Am I interpreting this correctly? Is Christina dead? She speaks of being on the outside looking in. In a few spots of your writing there is not a comma before the word 'but'. What part I liked best: I liked as the reader I am led gently along with the strolling woman. Neither of us is suspicious. When I arrive at the end of the story I realize her not having a name is unimportant. This woman represents all woman and in particular mothers loathe to die and leave their children behind. She needs a ruse to encourage her to take that final step. Of course a mother would wish to take her child with her even if it is one that exists in her memory. This is an eerie, yet strangely peaceful scenario. The entire thing is orchestrated to reduce or eliminate any stress or pain. The final explanation given to young Willy is illuminating and logical. Perhaps it is also plausible. That empty baby buggy represents cherishing, carrying and protecting one's offspring. You put a great deal of thought into this tale. Kudos!Overall Impression: This is a poignant description of letting go and dying. Thanks for allowing me to read your work. It has been a pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully. (1863 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.