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A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Title: Summer Tides

Hi Beherebook: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: I love beaches, the oceans and lakes, so I wanted to read this. I read the first lines and realized this is about the beach and looks like it is also about a lost love. This peaked my interest. I read on and now I am here to give you a review and my observations.

What needs your attention: You may want to change the title to Summer Tides and Lost Love or maybe Love and The Tides, Just food for thought. You read this and it involves more then summer tides. Otherwise, you got this covered.

What part I liked best: And in the waves, there are no tears. I know there's comfort in the tides. I'll run with you forever more. I'm coming soon to reunite with you. In the waves, there are no tears. I like the flow. Any poem about the ocean is nice and inviting.

Overall Impression: Creative and colorful combined with good reflections and sad reflections. Looks like you spent time with this. A neat rhyme pattern puts the words in order, blends them together and rounds this out with a good flair. I feel like I was there running in the waves.

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It has been my pleasure.