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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby ~ Way behind!

"Game of Thrones"  Hello fellow writer. My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes. Title: A Symphony of Love and ForgivenessFirst Impression: I love the title of your piece of poetry. It speaks of hope and the essence of what it means to be part of a family. This is a beautiful, lyrical poem. The rhymes are not forced and everything flows gracefully. You took great care to create wonderful imagery. What needs your attention: Nothing, absolutely nothing. Why alter a fantastic bit of writing. I notice the absence of spelling and grammatical errors. What I liked best: As I already stated your imagery is thoughtful and very descriptive. You convey feelings/emotions with just a handful of choice words. "Whispers of sorrow dance with the wind." This suggest the idea that grief is organic and just simply exists like the wind. And like the wind it cannot be controlled. It seems to be everywhere. "Each pang a chain binding her to a past she cannot erase." This is powerful. Memories are eternal and they can imprison people. I like the entire fourth stanza in which the children are adrift in a cold sea of mourning. The fifth stanza is mesmerizing with its promise of hope. "As forgiveness, like a fragile moss slowly covers wounds that once ran deep and slow." This evokes the passage of time, time needed to heal. "As bonds once frayed find their brilliance in the tapestry of love." Yes, families create their closeness with a weave of love. "A symphony plays, a melody of love and forgiveness intertwined." This ties in with the title and sums up your poem. Overall Impression: This is a powerful poem rich with beautiful imagery. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.(1846 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.