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 | Autumn  [E] Something that came to me this afternoon-not really a poem, but more like a visualisation.  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   Greetings, Eilir Rowan! I am reviewing this because today is your One Year Anniversary here at Writing.com.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked I like how you refer to this poem as a visualization in your Intro summary. That's perfect, because your poetry is exactly that! All visual. Nice work. I noticed you didn't use any punctuation at all, but you were consistent throughout. Sometimes I choose to do this, too. It gives the poem flow and allows the reader to float through it without barricades. Very nice.  I believe my favorite line is...Walking between the raindrops I love this line!!!!  I also liked...The ground itself rests In the autumn  Lovely, lovely, lovely visuals!!! Excellent work. Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderThe only suggestion I have, is to not begin every line with a capital letter. Just try it--experiment with it. I bet you'll like it.  Final ThoughtsThis is so beautiful! I noticed you haven't been around the last six months. I really hope you'll be back to join us.  You are obviously a very talented writer.Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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