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 Erase  [E]
Short poem about moving on
by Cr1tiKalZer0
Review of Erase  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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In our daily lives, many things happen that shouldn't have happened. The betrayal of a lover is one of them that hurts us most. The teller experienced the same. His lover damaged her faith too much. She was very much upset. But, being an ideal human, she tried to begin a fresh journey and decided to move on with a positive mentality. That type of attitude is needed if you want to go forward and do not wish to stop.
I especially like the last line,
"but I'll move on and figure it out somehow."- this line tells the entire story.
Suggestion
You have written well. But, you used the 'None ' genre twice. It is considered a negative genre.
If you follow carefully, you will find several replacements. It's your experience. So why should you not replace it with the genre 'Experience'? It tells about the relationship. So, why should you not add the genre 'Relationship'?
It's a good performance.
Keep writing.

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