Hello Jaiam

Here is a review for your "The Road to Zion!" .

You always have the last say on your work, and you are under no obligation to follow my suggestions.

Comments and Observations:

Such a heartfelt exploration of human experience and the transformative power of faith! Its images are strong with a language full of emotion, almost like a sermon, making it a powerful reflection of a spiritual journey. I'm certainly very glad I came across this lovely piece.

I can also say the structure of the poem attracted my attention, too, as it is composed of a series of stanzas, each one addressing different challenges on the road to Zion. It is an organized approach that made me see this journey of struggle and redemption through its various stages.

Then, words and phrases such as "stone-strewn road," "stormy road," and "darts and arrows that fall like rain," are very effective in describing the hardships and obstacles along the way. These powerful descriptions and introspective reflections make a reader empathize with struggles of the traveler. Also themes of faith, resilience, guidance by the divine, and the recurring motif of Christ as the guide offer reassurance and strength.

In short, this is a strong poem with reflection and insight into a spiritual journey that leads to "home" as the last line indicates.

Suggestions on the text as to grammar, usage, and punctuation

I saw no problems in this area.

Best wishes with your work.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .