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Hi, Princess Megan Rose 22 Years Here is a review for your fun "Chicken and The Shoes" ![]() ![]() Comments and Observations: What an interesting premise! The idea of a chicken being fascinated with a pair of shoes is quirky and original. It sets the stage for a charming and humorous story. What I think is the strength of this short story is its focus on Mary's character and her interactions with her animals, providing a potential for deep characterization and a slice-of-life feel. I know with GOT you probably wrote this in a very short time and that must be why you couldn't work on the transitions; however, while someone more astute in writing could say that the sentence structure is choppy, I did like the choppiness, in a way, for it gives the impression of sincerity and everyday talk. That the chicken loves the shoes as if they were other chickens made me laugh since it reminded me of my cat who loves to commandeer my folded laundry. This is just a fun write and if anyone looks for a clear point, message, or resolution, they better think twice. I really enjoyed reading it. Suggestions on the text as to grammar, usage, and punctuation Just a typo: "Sge pourrd" (should be "She poured"). Best wishes with your work. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
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