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First drum set

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My friend gave his 2 year old a drum set! Can you hear him play?
by Kåre Enga in Montana

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Review of First drum set

Review by StephBee

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem is about a boy with a drum set.

WHAT I LIKED

This is a very visual poem. I could picture a boy banging away, smiling, and having a blast.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to augment the visual aspect of the poem.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: Rat-tat-tat and a boom-boom-boom, crash-crash-crash cacophonous tunes" This phrase/line brings to life the banging on the drum. It's not only visual, but it's very auditory.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and makes them want to tap with their feet. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I love how the poem sounds when it's read outloud. A fun, playful read that captures the spirt of a toddler.