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Given: Jun 10, 2024 at 11:08pm
Length: 1,360 Characters |
1,187 w/o WritingML
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
A young girl goes through a traumatic experience, taking her life on a very different turn.
WHAT I LIKED
I thought the ending really brought the story full circle and ended on a note of hope.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the 3rd person limited from Emily's perspective. Past tense is used in the story.
OPENING PARAGRAPH
A quote sets a hopeful tone for the story.
The next paragraph sets the time and place and puts the reader in the moment.
CHARACTERS
Emily was a survivor and it's that aspect that makes her relatable to the reader.
FLOW & PACING
It worked well to tell a full story.
MECHANICS
I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.
PARTING THOUGHTS
The title hints at the story. The author uses a good economy words to tell a poignant story.
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