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The Firelight Honor  [E]
Very moving flag retirement: Crowd murmured as its remnants were lowered onto the campfire
by foxtale
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE ESSAY

An essay about a Boy Scout Flag retirement ceremony.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

This really touched me in 2 ways. I'm a US Army veteran having served between 1986-1997, and I was an Assistant Scoutmaster with Troop 2 out of Newhall, CA. My boys are both Eagle scouts and I led several overnight camping trips for the scouts. Yes, I'm a Boy Mom!

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by an unnamed narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of Patriotism. The 4th of July is right around the corner and people are making plans to spend the holiday right about now. And I think, with that's going on in the world right now, all the conlicts and drama, bringing it home with a sense of patriotism will keep one grounded.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
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*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* The author tapped into a sense of pride and stirred up a sense of what it is to take care of those symbols which represent our nation.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font to make it easier on the eyes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in with their sense of reverence. If you ever get a chance to see a Flag retirement, I highly recommend it. It will strike a cord in you. As an Assistant Scoutmaster, I've supervised Flag retirement ceremonies at our Court of Honors and Webelos' overnighters. The writing is candid, honest, and sincere. A heartwarming, inspirational vinyette.

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