Hi vluxyr,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow and defeat. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a girl who has no support from the people who she loves and fails at the one dream she has. I am so sorry for the girl in the poem. I know what it is like to not have the support of those in your life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.