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Goodnight's Kiss  [13+]
Sept 4 Entry (English Sonnet) - WDC Birthday Poetry Contest
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
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Review of Goodnight's Kiss  
Review by JACE
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon .

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Goodnight's Kiss" .

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. Good morning, Ken. I found this gem in the Read & Review feature. It's always a pleasure to read something from your mind.

You've written an English Sonnet about a special dream that happens only during sleep. Perhaps it's a long, hard day that makes one look forward to that which the night brings.

You've taken time to school your reader on the structure of an English Sonnet by adding a note at the end. The only issue I see is the broken link to the contest for which this offering was originally penned. In the case of that contest, you used the prompt loosely opting not to repeat it verbatim. That works for me.

Your poem reads almost lyrically to me--with a refrain you might set it to music with little effort. Have you thought of doing just that with any of your poetry?

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* Great job with your meter. I have no issues whatsoever.    

*Star* My Rating.  5.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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