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by Angelica- Happy July 4th!
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Review by Choconut
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Angelica- Happy July 4th! ,

This review was written on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . It is written for Week 26 of "I Write in 2024" .

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group with which they are affiliated. These are only the opinions and suggestions of the reviewer, and they are given solely for the purpose of being helpful.


What I liked:

*Bulletv* I love your title. It really drew me into the poem. It does, indeed, sound very magical. And as I started to read, I loved the falling star at the beginning. This gave a great visual for me. I could see the star-filled sky with this one magical falling star crossing the sky, before fading away. Love it.

*Bulletv* I love that the poem continues to tell a story of the wish you made upon the star. A little dragon, with a star on its forehead, looks up at the narrator, at the reader, and smiles, and it is so cute. I am in love with that dragon.

*Bulletv* I like your use of free verse in this poem. It is my favourite type of poetry, and you have written a really great example of it. I love the ending, with the stars reflected in the lake. It feels like the poem came full circle.


Suggestions:

I guess, mostly, I would have liked a few more visuals. Like, what colour was the dragon, what texture when the narrator climbed on its back?


Parting comments:

This is a cute, enjoyable poem. I love the images of stars that flow through the whole poem. I also really like the magical feeling, in particular, the sense of riding on the back of this dragon in flight.


Choconut
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