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High Hopes  [18+]
It's good to have goals!
by Legerdemain
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Review of High Hopes  
Review by JACE
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Legerdemain .

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "High Hopes" .

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. It's been awhile since I visited your Port and I needed to review a Purple case to satisfy a reviewing requirement. So here I am.

I had looked at a couple other items but decided I needed something a little lighter. As if reading about a hitman is lighter. *Wink*

I watched the video that offered the prompt for your story. An interesting interpretation, I think. But that's what makes this site so interesting--the imagination that explodes from person to person and story to story.

The fine print stated no minimum word count though it stated 500-word story was needed. You came close and that works for me.

It hard to put a lot of depth into characters with so few words availabe, but you succeeded in my opinion. I found it interesting that a man of Hendon's experience would actually do a hit with a partner, especially one with limited experience. Perhaps he was training the younger man to take over.

That thought obvious went wrong with your ending.

The other thought I had was Hendon must have been paid upfront for the hit since he was leaving immediately. Yes, I realize the difficulty in writing such a story quickly and with so few words available. All in all not too bad.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* Good job with your dialogue. No punctuation issues that I found.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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