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Monsieur Mike and Jessica of Troy  [18+]
Jessica is young, colorful, and gorgeous. Mike is older and...surprised he's nervous.
by Jakrebs
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings,

I found this using the Random Read and Review button. I wasn’t sure if it was my type of story at first, but I ran my eye over it carefully and didn’t see anything too explicit, so I hopped in and watched the relationship grow and develop. Mike was very kind to Jessica, and if the situation was different it would have worried me that he was “grooming” her for something. But he did his best to leave her better than he found her, and the ending is poignant and satisfying as we see Jessica stepping out confidently into a new life with someone who cares for her.

The way things are in the real world, I have a hard time believing something as delicate as this would work out well, but it was a pleasant read. I like the care and tact you’ve treated the story with, and the characters are colorful and real and amusing. The timeline is helpful to set the pace for each situation, and I don’t have anything specific to suggest for improvement. Perhaps the use of Size 4 Verdana would help to ensure visibility across devices.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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