TOUR DE PORTS 2024



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A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


Hello, Lori Grawitch!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

Wow! You wrote a fantastic faith-filled poem that I greatly enjoyed reading.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

You encouraged me and reminded me of God's faithfulness and protection as I read this beautiful faith-filled poem of yours.

If the Lighthouse Poetry Contest opens again, I think this poem would be a strong contender and I encourage you to enter it when / if the prompt allows.

I loved that your thumbnail picture for this is perfect for the poem, reflecting the prayer candles many light when praying to Our Lord God.

I loved the whole poem and can't even pick a favorite part. If I really had to, it'd be this line: "My thunderous steed, all truth and reason" because of its beauty and uniqueness.

The last line makes for a beautiful and powerful ending, and portrays the kind of humble, devoted spirit that I believe the Lord loves.

I thought the inspirational genre you selected was perfect for this faith-filled poem of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of Tour de Ports review challenge I'm in require that, I have two little suggestions to make your piece stronger. I'm having to dig deep for thess as I really thought your piece was well done as it is though. I also think such an spiritual and emotional piece should be left to stand on its own. So if you want to skip this part, no worries at all! Just move on to the next section and know that I greatly enjoyed your poem.


First, I think this line is just missing a comma after "beacon." Right now it looks like this: "Staunch beacon my steerage through the storm." If you added the comma, it would then look like this: "Staunch beacon, my steerage through the storm."

Second, I'd recommend not bolding the whole poem and instead just using a larger font size, if what you're going for is readability. A very easy fix, should you choose to do it. No worries if you don't, obviously. This is a review, which is meant to be a gift, and you can do whatever you like with gifts.


CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I greatly enjoyed reading your strong faith poem.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 



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