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| (5.0)   Hi, Kiya! What a powerful poem. You expressed so much emotion in just a few lines, which takes some talent. From your raw word choice to your tasteful rhythm, this poem was excellent. ~~~ The flow of this poem was great. I’ve never attempted a Fibonacci, so I just might have to do that now! I liked how the lines became longer and then reverted to a shorter line in the last part. You executed this form beautifully. ~~~ There are no suggestions I can make as far as grammar/spelling. Your word choice was superb and I could feel that gut-wrenching emotion and anger that a person belonging to a minority may feel in this country. I really liked how you kept the entire poem lowercase, other than the first line. It also works well that the one capitalized word also acts as the title of your piece. Well done. ~~~ Overall, this was an awesome short poem. I appreciated the raw emotions and the strong representation this poem displays. I can tell you wrote this piece from the heart, which is what always makes for good poetry. This poem conveys a message that 99% of the US needs to reflect upon, and search to reach a higher level of acceptance and overall love for our fellow humans. Fantastic job. Thank you for sharing!  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/07/2024 @ 12:01pm EDT