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Did you think that he liked you? Yes. No. Maybe a little. Well he doesnât and wouldnât like a girl like you. Thatâs a usual conversation between Scar and I she loves to let me know how unlikeable with my defect and all. Like I donât already know this my caramel skin filled with all this white patches who would want a girl like that. Laying on my bed now thinking about my encounter with him. I donât know his name but he has the most captivating blue eyes you could ever see and he actual talked to me today. Well it was only to ask for a pencil and I could barely form words and the fact that I threw the pencil at him I get where Scar is coming from. Iâm always right only turning to save you the heart break. I can take car--- âAmy! Lauren is here.â My father yelled I always tell him to text me I hate loud noises they irritated me. Lauren had been my best friend since middle even though I donât understand why a girl like her would be friends with me little old Amy with the oily hair, thin lips with bucked teeth and discolored patches all over her body. Lau was the spitting image of what a beautiful girl is. Her ivory skin glowed in the sun light, she had full pillow like lips, legs that could go for miles and curves in all the right places donât forget her flaming red hair that everyone thought was fake. âYour fucking always there day dreaming you know.â I jumped a little at her voice. âJesus! Lau you startled me, make some noise next time.â I turned to her pulling her into a hug. âWhere hell did you go after school I waited two fucking you bitch so we could go to get ice cream?â âI was planning to call--- âI can fucking clearly see that. Where the hell is your phone?â She mutter cutting me off she made her way over to my bed sitting down crossing her arms. She had that look on her faced the one where she knew I was lying. âItâs complicated!â I sighed sitting on the computer chair her face softened. âIs it that bitch Scar again?â âYeah itâs always her.â âShouldnât let the bitch control your life?â She grasped my arm pulling me closer to hug me she thought that Scar was one of my family memberâs. See the thing is no one knows anything about Scar other than the fact that sheâs my supposed cousin. âIâm fine.â I know thatâs what I really wanted to say I know that I shouldnât let her control me but its hard Scar had so many good points about life how could I not listen to her. People didnât like me other than Lauren âYou know you can trust me right?â Lauren stood walking to my bookshelf picking up the photo of us two on my eighth birthday. We were both dressed as princesses and had cake smeared all over our faces. You looked like a freak back then to? Ha! Ha! No, my mother would let me know how beautiful I was ever day when I was younger. Why couldnât she just leave me alone? Well sheâs a liar. I use to be seen as beautiful before you came around. You Monster! âAmy, Amy are you in there?â Lauren waved her hand in front of my face. âHuh?â âYou blacked out again,â She signed sitting on my bed again the picture frame still in her hand she had this look in her eyes like she was reminiscing about the past. âYouâre doing that a lot now lately. Do you remember when this picture was taken?â âYeah my eighth birthday and we smashed our faces into the cake and my dad took the picture before my mom could clean us up.â I laughed thinking about that day my mom had gotten all worked up about us staining our dresses she was the type of person to worry about the light things like that every little detail matter to her. âHey do you want to go to Rockies get our Fudgy special that always made things brighter.â Lauren asked standing from the bed walking over to me. âYeah that sounds like a plan.â I grabbed my coat from the back of my chair and we made our way down stairs. My fatherâs car wasnât in the drive way so he probably went to work I didnât bother to look for my mom because I knew how she felt about seeing my face. I slide into the front seat of Laurens rusty pickup truck and we speed off the Rockies. Not a single thought of Scar in my mind. âYou canât keep doing this Scar.â Jory hissed at me taking a seat on the stairs of Uetiz Hall she strongly disapproved of what I was doing to Amy. âOh but itâs so fun.â I complained if we were going too trapped in the in-between then at least we should be able to have a little fun with the humans. Either way Amy was different. In school we out-fast learned that we wouldnât be able to enter any mind but that of a Shimmer or fellow Out-Fast human minds were closed off to us. But not hers and I wanted to find out what made her different for the others. âYou know the consequences if the Elementals find out about your little Shifting.â She reprimanded me as if she were my mother. âI donât care youâre not my mother.â I uttered. âNot like any of us here have parents.â She sneered turning back to one of the portals were two humans one male the other female were laying in one of those human contraptions I think they called it a car kissing. Jory was always fascinated with human relationships I think she longed for to have something like that again. Long ago there was a Shim named Dovark who accidently ended up in the in-between on the way back from New Common Wealth Jory found him and hid him in her home. Jory like any smart Out-Fast hide her face from the lovely Shim not to offend him but Jory hid her burn marks from everyone ashamed of the way she was born. She like me would never come to accept the way we were born and was constantly looking for us to change the way we looked. Long story short they fell in love Jory thought she could trust him and let her glamour he freaked out ran away was caught by an Elemental and executed in front everyone. Jory was whipped and chained temple pillars for a month for her crime of harboring a Shim. âWhy bother longing for something you canât have?â I ask marching down the steps of Uetiz Hall love was a foolish thing to wish for and Jory knew this. Monsters like us didnât deserve love we donât understand how to love its not like we were fucking taught this by parents. I donât even know what my parents look like just that my mother was a human whore and my father a Hade but not just any Hade but a top ranked general. âHoping for love ainât wrong you know,â Jory came to step next to when the humans kissing became to heated I would never understand the appeal of having someoneâs tongue in your mouth. âPromise me that youâll leave that girl alone tonight.â âI canât do that Joryâ I whined she always had to be such a joy kill couldnât allow me any sort of fun what a friend. âPromise!â âOkay. Okay. I promise Iâll leave her be tonight.â I murmured hanging my head down. âThank you now letâs get to that meeting.â Jory grabbed my hand and dragged me along with her out of the hall making our way to the meeting room boy were we in for a night of boring talk about obeying the laws enforced by the elementals and the consequences of breaking them. |