The Snowflake Chronicles

Suggestion for corrections or rewrits for stories, etc.

I need to make corrections and/or check if I made the corrections in the following stories.

"In The Forest"  - Why did you stinge while describing the symbols on the trees? I think it would have made for an amazing photo-essay had you been carrying a camera and shot some pictures. What a sweet essay this was otherwise! I liked the way you stuck to the beauty of the walk rather than talking about other, more peripheral or psychological things which some authors are apt to do! On the minus side was the fact that the item seemed "curtailed" at the very end. Also, you seem to have switched from the Present to the Past tense in between. At one place, you have misspelt the word "trees" as "tress". Do rectify these shortcomings and let me know so that I can re-rate this item. Dr Taher writes again!
"Sea Runner"  That was a very interesting write up of a type of fantasy character. I can clearly imagine their usefulness in a story of any length. Let me know if you write one. It'll be very interesting and entertaining to read. The description is also very good, makes them real. Nice work. Shylah
"Map of My Port"  What would make this item even better is if you listed the titles of the works in each folder underneath the folder names. You could use the litem tag or the bitem tag so that someone could just click on the link and go to the item. That's what I would prefer, as a reader, anyway. I'm glad I found your portfolio; I stumbled across it while reading the technical forum posts and recognized your username. (We're on the journalwriting yahoo email list together, if you were wondering.) Have a great day! Cass--Too Hot Spirit