What'd I ever do to Neil Clark Warren? Online dating is way too sterile and scary. I miss the chemistry, the spontaneity. I miss my "G"male. And I remember our first kiss. No inert web profile can compete with electricity. I need the sizzle. ZAP me - please!
JRo, Good first effort at writing. I could relate, a similar thing happened to me recently. I ran into a girl i knew many years ago. She reminded me of the first time I had sex. I was young, nervous, inexperienced...I was alone. (i must of told her).
You have some good, interesting lines in this piece. I especially liked the never-vescent repartee and soul/sole
and
no risk taken, no harm done
productivity has suffered but spirit has improved.
These type of sentence structures are really good visuals or feeling emotors (i made a joke--E motors,; maybe
E motors could take the place of Chevrolet)
I hope you'll continue to write. It is cathartic and fun. Be sure to fill out your profile-bio here at writing.com That will help others find your writing(s). Good luck. Usually all girls remember is the kiss of the frogs. -M. Kapson
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Well, I have to say that was one of the most entertaining first blog entries I've ever read. Don't stop now!