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Blog - A Young Writer's Journey

by WriterAngel

Rated: 18+ · Book · Internet/Web · #2256499

A blog documenting my writing journey

I hope this is entertaining... :)

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

tracker

Nov 1, 2023 at 6:05pm
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You wrote "I hope this is entertaining... :)" Yes indeed I am totally blown away by your poetry blog. I have never seen anything like it! Hi, I am tracker. I have had some contact with you because I have fan'd you. I wonder if there is anywhere the system tells you when you did that? After being here awhile you can accumulate a whole lot of fans. Your adjectives stand out. "Squishy, suctioned, autumnal, fleshy for example. Who does that better than you do? I am really impressed. I only have one question. What is your name IRL so I can look on Amazon? Take care.
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Kåre Enga in Montana

Jun 15, 2023 at 11:46pm
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Yes, keep trying. The syntax seems a bit twisted, making the rhymes seem forced, so it doesn't flow smoothly.

The use of -ast and -erst rhymes was good though.

Title: would "Palm Reading" be better?

WriterAngel

Jun 7, 2023 at 11:40am
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Thank you so much for the feedback and kind words! I didn't even think of that hymn, although that's one of my faves.

It's a good idea to expand it a bit. I wrote it originally for Express It in Eight, but I could certainly keep working on it more...

Kåre Enga in Montana

Jun 5, 2023 at 11:56pm
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I really liked this. The use of 7/7/7/7 divide 3/4 or 4/3 reminds me of the hymn "Rock of Ages" and adds a musical component to these two verses.

There could be more... a third verse going back in time... maybe two verses... and then a last verse back to the present/future/ancient-past.

I have a variety of traumas and triggers. Not all memories are unpleasant but bad ones once triggered take me back. Photos work well for me, occasionally music (but more for emotion), and fragrance.

Use of the 5 senses to describe a before time might be interesting.

Now I'm back at my grandparents... circa 1960: a red cardinal, smell of rotten tomatoes, lilacs (May 1963), cold floor of the basement (we slept there on hot nights in August), flash of the fireflies, the slant of the hillside, the red sidewalk and white tires of nasturtiums, taste of split pea soup, and fresh baking bread (twice/week). Sound of? Maybe the porch swing... ah... the whistle of the steam engine (Pennsylvania RR main line).

Thank you for taking me down the dirt/gravel path through the hollow.

Ray Scrivener

Mar 31, 2022 at 2:49pm
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Hey, no rush on the writing front! I'm currently trying to work around my own responsibilities so we'll figure things out when we can.

And careful tossing that praise around, we haven't even dipped our toes in the story yet

Can't wait to see where these pirate adventures lead!

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S. Serpent

Mar 13, 2022 at 7:23am
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Maybe I'm overthinking things, but I quite enjoyed this little poem. Maybe it's the fact that the poem is in the shape of a pyramid, but I think of ascension. I know you like hiking, so I wouldn't be surprised if some of this was molded from those experiences.

Tryst is such a funny word for me; each time I run into the word, I've already forgotten what it means. I had to google it to remind me. Here's hoping this poem lets it stick for me.

Great use of the elements, the sensations makes this place rather bitter yet beautiful to me--like a mountain.

Keep it up! You've always had a great vocabulary right up your sleeve!

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Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:30pm
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Omelette du fromage, oui oui. But seriously, I've forgotten all but a handful of vocabulary and a snippet of grammar. I really want to get my French passport but that means studying French again to pass a language test. New Year's resolution maybe?

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:26pm
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Holy shit! That's so cool! Do you speak French?

Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:16pm
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Citizen, thank you very much! (Even though it's only on account of my father, but hey.)

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 3:53pm
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Never would I have suspected that there was a Francophile in our midst! :)

December 8, 2023 at 8:32pm

#1060697

Sentinel

Cast in vertical shadow, wide eyes rise,
majestic wind licks clustered needles.
Cerulean canvas, vast and free,
splashed with green and brown and white.

Beneath the stars, this void protects,
oddly comforting absence of light.
We shudder in its dark embrace,
this monument, my silent might.

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December 7, 2023 at 7:14pm

#1060655

Good Intentions

A rosy cheeked smile,
bright youthful eyes,
I hop onto the first step.
Accordion of concrete
rises before me,
bright gasping pathway
to my shrouded pinnacle,
faces of each step shimmering
with effervescent Pollyanna’s
fizzing, foamy hope.

Halfway to the top,
ascent now methodical,
I glance downward.
Strange. From this angle,
the surface of each stone step
so much dimmer. Remarkable.
Tepid stone beneath wiggling toes
not dark… but no longer light.

Wiping beaded sweat from my brow,
I plod upward, dry soles rasping
with slowing momentum.
I look up. Then about.

My path?!
My steps?!
Erased!

Soaked, like me,
in duplicitous shadow.

Damned disorienting darkness.

Everywhere.

Only vacuous void,
curling like missing flames
about my feverish feet.

But…
I never strayed...
From my path…

How am I lost?
How did I go wrong?

Where am I?
Who am I?

How…
on earth…
did I get…

…here?

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