This is a WDC Power Reviewer Review. I am not a professional copy editor. These are my opinions as a writer, reader, and lover of words. Please take or leave my opinions as you will.

Overall Impression:

I sort of blinked when I first read this story. It could be the rape and murder of a woman...or simply a man lighting up a joint and finishing it before moving on to the next bar. Interesting double play.

Style and Voice:

I liked the voice of your narrator. He was gritty and dirty, from the poor side of town.

Scene/Setting:

The setting of an alley somewhere in a city fit the mood of the piece well.

Grammar and Mechanics:

I could see no grammar errors. You have proofed this well.

Suggestions:

I can't say that I have any suggestions for you. I liked your story, it was interesting and made me think for a few moments.

Take care.