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 The Debt  [18+]
Brotherly love is tested. (Dialogue 500 Contest Entry.)
by Jeff
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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(Disclaimer: any opinions are strictly my own, to do with as you will. Keep what you find helpful, toss the rest with yesterday's paper)

Dialogue is my weakest point as a writer. As such, I am humbled by your skill in this dialogue-only piece.

The conversation flows naturally. The story develops at a good pace. You create two distinct and believable character voices. The premise is a good one, and you do very well with it, expecially over the course of such a short piece.

The title and intro are both solid.

Even the use of profanity, which I do not tend to be a fan of, works well in this piece.

I have noted no errors

Thankyou for sharing your talent, although you have created a definite level of jealousy in this particular fan *Smile*. Write On!


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