Hello, I enjoyed your story. You seem to have done some research on your subject and that is good. The flow of the story was good. I like the relationship between the Grandfather and Granddaughter. It shows the respect we don't see much of in our society today for our elders.
Patrick stopped working when his granddaughter came down the stairs. She 'warned' him it was only her. Was he hiding from someone or something just not wanting to be startled?
The story was easy to read through. I like the voice of the story, it's like listening to a grandfather tell one of the best stories that you never get tired of hearing. Will Grandfather ever answer the age old question of is he a fairy? LOL I like the fact that it doesn't actually get answered it remains a mystery and legend. The characters were likable and and realistic. Does the grandfather go to the parade? Is the point of the story going to the parade or spending time with family? Why was there a heater in the basement? Why was his workshop in the basement?
Grammatically: looked good, no spelling errors I saw.
Overall this story left me satisfied. Keep writing.




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